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These painful tears still fall down
For the suffering I never give in
Angel wings of mine covered in crimson
Had forgotten how to fly long time ago

This little piece of ice I hold in my hands
For it shows the coldness deep inside
These eyes now empty and merciless
No tears, no more tears I shed

In this forest of darkness I walk
As a deadly shadow of the night
I roam forevermore these paths
There is still lost beauty within

These morbid thoughts better hide
They have darkened innocent hearts
Once so warm, pure and loyal
Turned into the worst suffering

His vicious life
Ends as the dawn rises


This shattered heart of mine I give

... For freezing winter
For fallen leaves
For forsaken lands...

For you
I wrote it... for myself..

It's.. hard to explain.

It seems to be.. It might seem not ready, but it is. It is exactly perfect.

Though it isn't good poem at all.
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Indeed this is quite an interesting piece, personaly I love the sybolism and the visual you painted for the reader. Thus I gave you four ad a half stars. (I really hate giving perfect, or close to perfect scores, so you truely did do amazing)

Truely a very original piece! While some might say otherwise, I know this came from very deep within you. That is originality in its purest form.

Your technique was also somthing that came from a very deep part of your soul and i loved the symbolism of your heart being a chunk of ice, very creative and very visual.

Impact, wow! What can i say? Well I'll start with the fact that the whole thing was very beautiful, and I felt very emotional while reading this.

Overall a great piece, continue work like this, i love it.
(Thank you so much i always wanted to critique someones work. You are my first and have just inspired me to do more.)
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AlexiaRowell1993 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
so interesting.
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How come?
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AlexiaRowell1993 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
well i all love poems especially your morbid ones, this is amazing.
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nightembersglowing Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't say this is bad!! It's really good. The imagery is really clear and the words are beautiful, even for someone whose native language is English. Plus it is very deep and is moving.
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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nightembersglowing Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's ok.
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KasdeyaWolf Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
i love this
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
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Eclipseflash Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's beautiful :)
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ScullReaper Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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